| Author | Message | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 645 Registered: 08-2005 |
Mama! Mama! He's drunk again! Old truck coming up our dirt road, held there by hitting the ditch on either side and bouncing back. Lucky drunk bastard. Truck never did think of smashing into a telephone pole. We all scattered like scared mice. All but Annie. She was in the back yard reading fourteen-year-old girl stuff: "Gone With the Wind." We hollered, we did. Ran past her into the corn field. Figured she would be behind us shortly. Mama was. Old truck didn't stop in front like usual. He drove straight through to the back screeching to a halt just a few spare inches from where Annie was reading. He got out of the truck, hatred glaring. "Ya stupid cunt bitch, gonna jus set thar and get killed? Serve ya stupid bitch self right. One less lousy mouf ta feeeeeed." Then he went down on his knees puking. We watched in horror. He was going to kill her. Annie shut her book. Got calmly up off the ground, lifted up that two-pound heavy hardback and slammed it down on our beloved father's head... Don't (slam!) you (slam!) ever (slam!) beat (slam!) me (slam!) or (slam!) threaten (slam!) me (slam!) again! (slam!) Useless (slam!) drunk (slam!) bastard! (slam!) I'll (slam!) send (slam!) your (slam!) stinking (slam!) ass (slam!) to (slam!) hell! (slam!) Annie called out to the corn field: "It's all right. Ya'll can come out." He never did hurt Annie again; and us less if she was around. (Message edited by morganlafay on October 27, 2005) (Message edited by morganlafay on October 27, 2005) | ||
| Zephyr
Senior Member Username: zephyr Post Number: 2975 Registered: 07-2003 |
Morgan strong stuff here, the form suits. No child should have to live with that, well done. | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Senior Member Username: garyb Post Number: 5371 Registered: 07-2001 |
Morgan, another wow. A story well told, hard, but right as corn. I do not envy Sis this week (if ever). Smiles. Gary The Eye of the Coming Storm http://www.mindfirerenew.com/ | ||
| ~M~
Board Administrator Username: mjm Post Number: 5612 Registered: 11-1998 |
A very good story, Morgan. And told so the reader can be right in the middle of the action. Thanks for giving us a strong female character. Gotta love Annie! | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 651 Registered: 08-2005 |
I do love Annie. She is my sister. And this is part from our old lives. I had 4 sisters and 4 brothers. Lots of stories, not all bad. The bad ones seem to keep popping up first. Just felt like writing it last night. Thanks for reading Ms. M. | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 3195 Registered: 07-2002 |
Morgan--a strong read--gripping. I wondered about whether you needed the stanza starting with: "Even without a beating, he caused us " I might skip right to the final couplet. Whatever you decide--good stuff. Thanks for posting. best, ljc http://ljcbluemuse.blogspot.com/ | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 652 Registered: 08-2005 |
Thank you Lisa. I removed that stanza as suggested. I wish I could as easily remove it from my memory. It does read better though (smile). | ||
| Sis
Moderator Username: djclowes Post Number: 236 Registered: 11-1998 |
Dear Morgan, I found this piece to a be a difficult read for me. It is also difficult to respond to simply because it rings in my own memories too clear , too cold and too real. I only wish I could have been that brave instead of pretending I could do it..would do it. You have done a fabulous job of speaking out for those of us who could only pray for that kind of courage. Thanks Sis | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 698 Registered: 08-2005 |
Thank you Sis. There are so many of us (then and now) who have been mistreated as a child; when we should have been playing and laughing instead of looking over our shoulder wondering where the next slap or kick was coming from. I wasn't brave. I wanted to be. It seems the meeker you were, the more you got it. My brother just older than me and I would think and think and dream of how to do him in, knowing we never would. As soon as we could, we just all got away. I could write a book on abuse. Innocents win in the end, no matter how old we get, God won't forget such treatment of his children. | ||
| Christopher T George
Senior Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 2811 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi Morgan Powerful statement and a worthy winner of Poem of the Week. Congratulations, Morgan. Margaret Mitchell's Gone With the Wind never did find a more worthy use.  Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ Co-Editor, Loch Raven Review http://www.lochravenreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ | ||
| Morgan Lafay
Intermediate Member Username: morganlafay Post Number: 710 Registered: 08-2005 |
Thank you Chris! I am so happy over this and so surprised! Totally surprised. I love it, of course! |
